Patrick Connors asked:
Hello Lisaper, Thank you for posting this drawing in the "atelier" so that you and everyone can benefit. Once again, a good effort. Without the photo reference I am unable to make particular criticisms: linear placement, proportion, and can only make vague suggestions for compositional structure or for the tone [or value]. Do you have any response on my comments for your first posting [2nd Sketch]? It is important that each student replies to my commentary. It does not have to be much, a sentence or two. Or more, if you desire. Nor do you need to agree with me. For example, did you try turning these drawings upside-down so that you could analyze their spatial quality? As good as this drawing is, it does have some problems with the depiction of depth. These spatial deficiencies are are not readily apparent but can be made so very easily by turning the drawing upside-down. In both of your drawings you demonstrate notable control in rendering the elements in the ground plane. This will be useful as you proceed in the course and expand your ideas in spatial expression.